Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Write at least 250 words.
With the
advent of technology and a plethora of information available on the internet have made people self-reliant. Most Change preposition
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the
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individuals
are becoming dependent on these technological advancements for solving their heatlh
problems Correct your spelling
health
insted
of paying a visit to their concerned physician. I opine that it is a negative growth and increasing Correct your spelling
instead
cases
of drug toxicity and antibiotic resistance, will prove this
.
To begin
with, the majority of the populace rely
upon search engines like Correct subject-verb agreement
relies
google
to be their free doctor. Not being a medical professional only allows them to know some symptoms of the condition rather than the complete Capitalize word
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daignosis
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diagnosis
Thus
, they take medicines for the same, as
a result, the Correct word choice
and as
cases
of drug toxicity are on a
rise. Correct article usage
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, 7 out Change preposition
of 10
10
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individuals
who treat themselves without consulting any general practitioner Correct subject-verb agreement
suffer
suffers
from organ Correct subject-verb agreement
suffer
faliures
mainly kidney and liver.
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failures
failure
Furthermore
, every medication prescribed by the physician has to be followed for a specific time period and
before stopping it. Correct word choice
apply
Inspite
of spreading awareness Correct your spelling
In spite
by
numerous campaigns amongst Change preposition
through
the
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individuals
, they still rely on saving the check-up fees and self-medicating themselves
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Hence
, the cases
of antibiotic resistance are on the all time
high, making simple and easily treatable diseases like cold and flu hard to manage. Add a hyphen
all-time
Consequently
, these people have to be hospitalised for the same. To illustrate, more than 50 per cent of the general wards are filled with non-responding to medications cases
due to
the illegitimate abuse of pharmaceutical products.
To sum up
, more and more individuals
are going to self-treat themselves, which will increase their problems in the coming times rather than solving
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solve
it
. It's the person's responsibility to be aware of the Correct pronoun usage
them
consquences
that come Correct your spelling
consequences
along with
this
action and ought to consult their physician for any illness they suffer from.Submitted by mrigankingley2099 on
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