Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Write at least 250 words.

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advent of technology and a plethora of information available on the internet have made people self-reliant. Most
of
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the
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individuals
are becoming dependent on these technological advancements for solving their
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health
problems
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instead
of paying a visit to their concerned physician. I opine that it is a negative growth and increasing
cases
of drug toxicity and antibiotic resistance, will prove
this
.
To begin
with, the majority of the populace
rely
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upon search engines like
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to be their free doctor. Not being a medical professional only allows them to know some symptoms of the condition rather than the complete
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diagnosis
.
Thus
, they take medicines for the same,
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a result, the
cases
of drug toxicity are on
a
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rise.
For instance
, 7 out
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of 10
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10
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individuals
who treat themselves without consulting any general practitioner
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suffer
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suffers
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suffer
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from organ
faliures
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failures
failure
mainly kidney and liver.
Furthermore
, every medication prescribed by the physician has to be followed for a specific time period
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before stopping it.
Inspite
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In spite
of spreading awareness
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numerous campaigns amongst
the
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individuals
, they still rely on saving the check-up fees and self-medicating
themselves
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.
Hence
, the
cases
of antibiotic resistance are on the
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high, making simple and easily treatable diseases like cold and flu hard to manage.
Consequently
, these people have to be hospitalised for the same. To illustrate, more than 50 per cent of the general wards are filled with non-responding to medications
cases
due to
the illegitimate abuse of pharmaceutical products.
To sum up
, more and more
individuals
are going to self-treat themselves, which will increase their problems in the coming times rather than
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it
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them
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. It's the person's responsibility to be aware of the
consquences
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consequences
that come
along with
this
action and ought to consult their physician for any illness they suffer from.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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