The graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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the
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information about the
number
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shops
that opened and closed in
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countries
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country
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from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the
number
of
shops
that closed fluctuated most throughout the period. In the beginning,
opening
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was the highest before rose to the lowest
at the end
of
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, whilst closures in 2011 and 2018 slightly changed. The
number
of
shops
that closed in 2011 was approximately 6,500 and peaked at around 7,000 in 2013,
then
significantly dropped to 500 in the next 2 years.
However
, in 2016 was 10 times higher than in 2015 and remained stable to 2018.
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,
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of
shops
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openings
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greatest with 8,500 and began to decrease to 4,000 in the next year.
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of
shops
surged to 6,000 in 2014 and dropped to the same
number
as in 2012,
then
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unaltered
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2017. In the
last
year, it began to minimize to 3,000.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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