Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
At present, when
people
face Use synonyms
with
health problems, they prefer using Change preposition
apply
medicines
and curing by Use synonyms
non-professional
rather than going to Fix the agreement mistake
non-professionals
hospital
. In my opinion, I believe that Add an article
the hospital
this
is a negative development because patients will not recover from their sickness.
Some Linking Words
medicines
are sold by normal Use synonyms
people
who have little knowledge. Use synonyms
People
are increasingly trying alternative Use synonyms
medicines
since medical treatments at the hospital are expensive and some Use synonyms
people
cannot afford Use synonyms
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
As a result
, patients prefer to buy Linking Words
medicines
from local Use synonyms
shop
in the community. When they Fix the agreement mistake
shops
going
to the shop, they may select Wrong verb form
go
medicines
wrongly as they do not have knowledge and Use synonyms
seller
is non-pharmacy. In that event, patients cannot recover from Correct article usage
the seller
illness
since the Use synonyms
medicines
have no potential Use synonyms
in curing
the diseases.
Change preposition
to cure
In addition
, some medical care Linking Words
in
Correct your spelling
is
a
Correct article usage
apply
local
owned by non-professional who is Change the word
locally
finding
Verb problem
making
profit
. Correct article usage
a profit
As
Correct word choice
People
people
prefer other treatments outside Use synonyms
hospital
because it cheaper and have tons of reviews. When Add an article
the hospital
people
enter Use synonyms
to
Change preposition
apply
this
treatment, at first they will find it nice but after that diseases are more severe for the reasons that Linking Words
non-professional
doing it wrongly and they Fix the agreement mistake
non-professionals
did
not have knowledge of curing Wrong verb form
do
people
. Use synonyms
For example
, a recent study Linking Words
have
shown the Chinese treatment that Change the verb form
has
use
glasses and heat to identify Change the verb form
uses
illness
in the back of Use synonyms
body
, Add an article
the body
this
treatment could help to cure the disease and Linking Words
also
make Linking Words
people
hurt.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, alternative Linking Words
medicines
and treatments that do not come from Use synonyms
hospital
have negative effects of Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
stucking
in Correct your spelling
stuck
illness
and severe diseases. Use synonyms
Thus
, seeing a doctor is the best way to help Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
from
Change preposition
with
illness
.Use synonyms
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