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The bar charts below give information on the road transport in a number of European countries.

The bar charts below give information on the road transport in a number of European countries.
The diagram illustrates information on
the
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road transportation in a few European countries. Regarding the
first
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 bar
chart
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, Denmark has the
first
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place
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 at just above 12000
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per
year
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 and it is closely followed by France. On the other
hands
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, Germany and Spain have almost
same
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the same
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 number of
km
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 per
year
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 and they are in the
last
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 position.
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At
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 the end, Italy and United hold the middle
place
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 in the ranking.
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, the average value is about 10000. In regard
the
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to the
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 second
chart
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 which is about travel per person
for
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by
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 bus, train, metro and bike, Denmark is in
the
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first
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place
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 by far from the other countries. Unlike Denmark,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and France hold the
last
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place
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.
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At
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 the end, the average value is just over 1000 per unit.
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,
number
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the number
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 of
km
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 per
year
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 in the second
chart
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 is much less than the
first
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 one and the highest in the second
chart
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it
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was 3000
km
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 per
year
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although
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 the highest was more than 12000
km
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 per
year
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 for the
first
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hart
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chart
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, chart, place, year, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volume of road transport
  • economic activity
  • population density
  • infrastructure quality
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental pollution
  • road safety
  • policies or measures
  • public transport
  • road improvements
  • emissions regulations
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