Because of the rising cost of living, many young people are increasingly being forced to live with their parents into their 30's. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Due to
the rapid development of the society and economy, the cost
of living is increasing. Many teenagers cannot afford the cost
of living if they live independently. Therefore
, large
proportion Correct article usage
a large
f
them decided to live with their Change preposition
of
parents
so that
to prevent extra Correct word choice
apply
cost
. Some of them might already Fix the agreement mistake
costs
above
Add a missing verb
be above
age
of 30 and some may even Add an article
the age
got
married. The advantages and disadvantages of Change the verb form
get
be got
this
issues are discussed below.
Correct determiner usage
these
Firstly
, living with parents
can reduce expense
so that to appreciate Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
oursevles
. When living with Correct your spelling
ourselves
parents
, young people
do not have to spend extra living cost
for another living place, including the rent, electricity Fix the agreement mistake
costs
cost
, etc. That save
a lot of Change the verb form
saves
money
which can use
Wrong verb form
be used
it
for another meaningful Correct pronoun usage
apply
cost
. For example
, young people
can spend this
money
to join some professional courses to learn a new thing, or even they may use
the money
to have a gorgeous dinner together with
their parents
. If young people
are got
married or even have Verb problem
apply
children
, a huge expense is needed to take care of the children
. When young people
feel annoyed at that environment, they can use
the money
to travel or have a staycation to relax themselves
and separate from Remove the pronoun
apply
the
Change the word
their
parents
for awhile
. Correct your spelling
a while
Therefore
, living with parents
can save money
and people
can use
it to higher their living standard
in Fix the agreement mistake
standards
another aspects
.
Another advantage Replace the adjective
another aspect
other aspects
due to
this
issue is parents
gives
support easily if they are living together. Correct subject-verb agreement
give
Parents
gave
lived with their Verb problem
apply
children
for at least 18 years. Parents
know about you, for
example
your eating Add the comma(s)
example,
habit
, Fix the agreement mistake
habits
emotion
, etc. If young Fix the agreement mistake
emotions
people
live with their parents
, parents
can take care of them and handle those little things in their lives. For example
, they want to have a lunch box durng
Correct your spelling
during
the
work time, it is time-consuming if they have to make it themselves, but when they live with Correct article usage
apply
parents
, parents
can prepare it for them according to
their eating habits. Moreover
, if the young people
got
married and have Wrong verb form
get
children
, parents
can also
help to take care of the kids, so they do not have to spend extra
Add an article
the extra
expense
to employ Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
a
unknown worker to Change the article
an
in
charge. Add a missing verb
be in
Therefore
, living with parents
may always give young people
a helping hand.
However
, if the relationship between young people
and their parents
is not good, it may turn this
issue to
a negative side. A lot of young Change preposition
into
people
desire to live independently after they become an adult. Why? Because as
Change preposition
of
parents
perspective, they love you so they control you. Change noun form
parents'
parent's
People
want to escape from them to lose their control. Therefore
, if those people
are forced to live with their parents
, they may always argue and cause a tension
environment at home, which is unhealthy Replace the word
tense
to
all the family Change preposition
for
member
.
Fix the agreement mistake
members
To conclude
, the advantages of living with parents
seems
Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
outweigh
the Add the particle
to outweigh
disadvantsge
. If the young Correct your spelling
disadvantage
disadvantages
people
and their parents
can put themselves into each other shoes, even they
are living in the same place, they can accept and pay respect to each other. Saving more Correct word choice
if they
money
to travel and have fun with each other to build a better relationship and wonderful memory
.Fix the agreement mistake
memories
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