Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The majority of
people
believe that the retirement age
for some individuals who live much longer should be extended. I disagree with the statement that older people
who live longer than others must work in old age
.
On the one hand, people
aged over 60 can not work very well because their brains and body
are worn out and at Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
this
age
, many of them have health problems such
as Alzheimer's.In addition
, working in any job have some requirement such
as mental readiness and a strong physical body hence
older people
can not do activities or think well. For example
, my grandfather is 65 years old and has medical issues, he can not walk more than 15 minutes because their knees feel in pain my grandfather has retired but at a younger age
, he was a strong man and worked for different companies but now he deserves to stay at home and relax.
On the other hand
, older people
gain valuable expertise during their lives for that reason we can ask for help to learn their knowledge and experience to do our obligation very well. I believe that extending retirement for this
type of people
is unhelpful. For instance
, in my university, many of the teachers were over 60 years old so they could not express the content well so I had to learn courses on my own.
To sum up
, I think older people
deserve to relax and rest in old age
and an important task is that they can teach their experience to other people
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