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73.Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the drive test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that for better safety on roads, the best option is to ask the drivers to take a driving
test
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 every
year
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.
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 essay completely disagrees with
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 statement because it will
increase
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 contamination and it will be a big waste of
money
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 for the families. Vehicles emit large amounts of carbon dioxide into the air, and the fuel that most cars use causes air pollution.
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 if each
year
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 an individual needs to take tests,
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people
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 who normally
drive
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 several times a
year
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 will start to
drive
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 more, ensuring that they still know how to
drive
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 correctly.
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, there are millions of
people
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 who know how to
drive
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, and all these cases will cause an
increase
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 in individuals driving on the roads which will
increase
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 pollution. Recent research concluded that around 30% of individuals in Spain who know how to
drive
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 have not touched a car in years. Individuals need to pay for taking driving tests. Some
people
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 may be nervous when they need to do a
test
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 so they will take more classes so they are more secure, but driving lessons
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 cost
money
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.
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, if
people
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 need to pay all
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money
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 each
year
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,
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 they are having more expenditure than they expected and
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 may cause financial problems for some families.
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, in many European countries, the price of taking a driving
test
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 is around 200 euros, and
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 could be the amount that they spend for two or three weeks meal for all the family. In conclusion, telling
people
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 to take a driving
test
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 each
year
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 will cause an
increase
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 in air pollution and is an unnecessary waste of
money
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, I,
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, believe that taking a driving exam every
year
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 will not improve safety but problems related.

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task response
The essay does not fully address the prompt and lacks a clear position on the issue. It is important to clearly express whether you agree, disagree, or partially agree with the statement and support your position with strong and specific arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. It is essential to provide a clear and cohesive introduction that introduces the topic and clearly states your position, as well as a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your position.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and lacks precise and varied expressions. It would benefit from using a wider range of vocabulary to enhance coherence and cohesion and to avoid repetition.
grammatical range
The essay contains instances of grammatical errors and lacks varied sentence structures. It is important to use a variety of sentence structures and to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical accuracy to convey ideas clearly and effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road transport safety
  • annual driving tests
  • road safety regulations
  • complacency
  • administrative costs
  • resource allocation
  • vehicle safety features
  • public awareness campaigns
  • traffic violations
  • enforcement
  • perceived inconvenience
  • financial burden
  • higher-risk groups
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