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In many countries, children show less respect to elders. What are the causes of such behavior? What can be done to address this situation?

In modern society, we can observe a trend in which younger generations disrespect older ones.
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 tendency has an enormous impact on the well-being of senior people. And I intend to give a brief outline of the main arguments and solutions. Perhaps it is not surprising that, with the fast development of technologies, the perception of adults has changed dramatically. Many teenagers have their own slang and get along well with modern technologies,
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 the elderly are not that aware of the newest trends. It may create a gap between those age groups. To take a case in point, young individuals tend to diminish the authority of people who are not trendy or underestimate them.
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, the primary reason for
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 trend might be a negative experience in communication with older generations in the past.
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, some adults experience a huge spectrum of negative emotions daily and can unconsciously spread their pessimism To tackle
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 issue, a range of practical actions may be implemented. Undeniably, the burden of responsibility lies with the government, and they should spread awareness through different public campaigns.
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, parents are
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 responsible for children’s education, which should definitely play a part in creating mutual trust and respect both in families and schools.
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 can definitely help to create a responsible and tolerant environment. All things considered, the number of people who show less respect to older individuals is unexpectedly massive and mostly caused by modern trends and the environment.
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, if governments and parents take steps to overcome
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 problem, the children’s attitude can change dramatically. I strongly believe that social campaigns and the right messages to younger individuals will change their behaviour.

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structure
Use a clear plan in the first sentence. Say what you will talk about.
coherence
Put one main idea in each new paragraph. Start with a topic sentence.
content
Add more facts or real examples to show causes and how to fix them.
grammar
Make the sentences short and easy. Cut long lines.
conclusion
End with a short end line that sums your view.
content
The essay keeps to the topic of ages and respect.
structure
It has a clear plan of ideas and a result.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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