The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree this this statement?

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The most momentous purpose of
science
should be human’s life improvement. I wholeheartedly agree with
this
statement and believe that with
this
aim,
science
generating will be eternal and the huge budget
that is
spent on it will be counted as a favourable investment.
Firstly
, learning and creating
science
requires a huge amount of time, that students, researchers, and scientists spend on every scientific project
as well as
money that government or private organizations spend on it. If a discipline profoundly improves people’s lives, all the allocated effort and finance will be beneficial and rewarding
therefore
, it becomes a satisfactory sort of investment.
Secondly
, if a branch of knowledge does not help the living conditions , there will be no motivation for doing scientific activities,
consequently
, it will be forgotten soon.
For example
, if the research on medical
science
could not result in curing diseases, it would discourage the sponsors and,
furthermore
, become regretful for researchers. There are
also
some other aspects of
science
that pursue various aims, but I think they are not the most important ones. Many scientific activities,
for instance
manufacturing high-tech weapons, aim to acquire political dominance which is not only positive but
also
devastating for humans at the present
as well as
in the near future.Another reason is that many scientific fields of study aim to recognize Earth's historical overviews,
such
as palaeontology, which does not directly improve human lifestyle and facilities. By way of illustration,
while
it is an interesting field of study, it has fewer followers in comparison with many other scientific majors namely physics, computer
science
, or medicine. In conclusion, the most outstanding goal of
science
is to improve living conditions and styles which guarantees its continuity as humans benefit from investing in it with their time and money.
Additionally
, researchers have the eagerness to improve it as they believe it may solve their problems and higher their quality of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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