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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
#floor #plan #library #years
The diagrams illustrate the changes of Central Library from 20 years ago until
present
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the present
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 day.
Overall
, there has been
a significant changes
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a significant change
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 in the facilities and the size of some rooms has expanded.
To begin
 with, 20 years ago, the first
room
 on the right side from the entrance was used for enquiry for tickets, book returns, etc. In the present day, the
room
 is replaced with the Cafe. The
room
 that
previously
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was previously
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 used for children's
book
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books
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 is replaced
into
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with
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a
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lecture
room
.
In addition
, the space between
children's
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the children's
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books
room
 and
enquiry
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the enquiry
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room
 that was previously used for adult non-fiction
books
 is replaced by
information
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an information
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 desk with three self-service machines and a number of adult fiction
books
. On the left side from the entrance, the reading
room
 (newspapers & magazines) was demolished and now is used
for
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as
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computer
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the computer
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room
. The
room
 at the back that was used for CDs, videos, and computer games was expanded and now is used for
story telling
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storytelling
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 events with two sofas and children's fiction
books
. The space in between that was previously used for adult fiction
books
 is replaced by all reference
books
.
In addition
, tables and chairs at the
center
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centre
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 of the library
is
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are
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 now removed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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