The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
the three pie charts illustrate the expenditure and the usage of five categories of resources and provide the information about distribution of
world
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the world
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population
.
Overall
, the largest resource
consumpsion
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consumption
occurs in the USA & Europe, the most significant
population
resides in Asia, and global expenditure comes to
'others'
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the 'others'
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category.
To begin
, at
the
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apply
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first
glance
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it is clear enough to know the most significant part of the
world
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population
live in Asia 57%, followed by Europe and America
that
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which
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have
similar
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a similar
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value which is 14% respectively,
whereas
slightly larger than Africa 10%.
Although
,
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the majority of
population
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the population
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live
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lives
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in Asia,
however
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however,
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the
consumpsion
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consumption
of resources
was
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made up the highest part of the USA and Europe.
According to
the first chart,
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the others
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others
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other
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category
was
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contributed the most to the
world
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outlay, followed by transport, food, and housing accounted for 24%, 18%, and 12% respectively. In comparison, people
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spent less of their money
in
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on
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clothing which means
'cloth'
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the 'cloth'
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category was the smallest segment
in
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of
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world
spending.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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