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All students should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 day and age, communication has a very true impact on
people
's lives. So
languages
 are a significant factor in contact with each other.
Language
 barrier is the largest problem when it comes to getting
along with
people
 who are from foreign countries. My own view on the matter is, that all schools should teach a foreign
language
 at an early age.
Due to
this
, young children have a nifty memory and are easier to understand than adults.
Furthermore
, when their growth is beneficial for them, they will have a foundation in learning a second
language
 that can be applied to learn more other
languages
. Or they can use their
language
 skills to make connections with foreigners.
On the other hand
, if teachers start to teach young children a long way, like teaching them to understand grammar
first,
it will be negative for children in the earliest grades because it is hard to recognize that the teacher should teach
according to
 the child's age.
Moreover
, numerous
people
 think that having
language
 skills rather than other
people
 who don’t know any
languages
 means having more knowledge and using that knowledge to suppress those who are less fortunate.
To sum up
, the advantage of studying foreign
languages
 since a young child has a nice foundation in
language
 skills that influence the future because it can be used to make contact with
people
 around the world.
However
,
people
 should use the knowledge they have to suppress others. You should put it to good use.
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