thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line chart illustrates the
proportion
of the inhabitants in four Asian countries who stayed in metropolitan
areas
from 1970 to 2020, with additional forecasts for 2023 and 2040. In general, the percentage of
population
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in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia stayed in metropolitan
areas
experienced an upward trend from 1970 to 2020.
Similarly
, the number of the inhabitants in city is
also
expected to increase. In detail, the
proportion
of Indonesians living in metropolitan
areas
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increased significantly in the past 50 years from about 15% in 1970 to around 50% in 2020 and it is expected to increase to around 60% in 2030 and 2040.
Similarly
, Malaysia had
also
risen dramatically, stood at 30% in 1970 and reached just over 70% in 2020. It
also
can be seen that the
proportion
of Malaysians
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in big towns is predicted to increase by around 80% in the same years.
Furthermore
, in the Philippines, the
proportion
of citizens
stayed
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in metropolitan
areas
had fluctuated from just over 30% in 1970 to over 40% in 2020 and it is expected to reach 50% in 2030 and over 50% in 2040.
On the other hand
, Thailand's
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gradually increased from just under 20% in 1970 to around 30% in 2020 and it is
also
expected to reach 40% in 2030 and over 40% in 2040.
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