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some people believe that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People's opinions differ as to whether environment-related issues should be tackled globally or through each specific nation in the
world
.
While
 it is argued that every
country
 is responsible for easing environmental problems, I still believe that it has to be
concern
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 throughout the
world
. There are two key reasons why some people consider each
country
 to be responsible for the air conditions of the
world
.
Firstly
, these groups might assert that if a
country
 assumes responsibility for all environmental issues of their nation, it would be more likely that they be fully to blame for related problems.
For example
, a state would restrict its environmentally harmful manufacturing factories despite its profits when there is a chance to be accused.
Secondly
, the impacts of
earth's
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 atmosphere could be controlled by boosting public awareness and a government could easily transfer these regulations and set punishments. In spite of the above arguments, I support the idea that
countries
 as a whole have to take measures in order to minimise air pollution. From an economic perspective, there are many parts of the
world
 where
countries
 are deprived and cannot afford costs in relation to developed air-quality equipment.
In other words
, wealthy nations have to offer their hand to these areas under the control of a global commitment.
Furthermore
, geographical boundaries are unreasonable when talking about the
world
’s air situation, which means that environmental issues would be lessened if
countries
 all across the
world
 started cooperating. In conclusion,
although
 it seems to some people that problems related to the environment should be mitigated by each
country
, I believe that management from all
countries
 is more effective.
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Ensure that all parts of the question are addressed and that your opinion is made clear throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks sufficient variety in linking words and cohesive devices. Consider using a wider range to improve the flow of ideas.
lexical resource
Try to incorporate a richer and more diverse vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
grammatical range
Work on using a wider variety of complex structures and sentence types to demonstrate greater control over grammar.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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