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The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago. summarise information and report main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago. summarise information and report main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides information about how changed the
indicator
 of processed food export
markets
 in the US
for
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last
year
 and six
years
 ago. In general, the Philippines
markets
are
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doubled their profit than other
markets
, despite the fact that
this
markets
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market
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 is one of the most
little
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apply
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profitted. We can see from the data that the best results in Canada's
markets
, it is considerably increased their money from 9.3
billions
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billion
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 to thirteen point two billion
dollar
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dollars
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. Nearly as many
markets
 as
Rest
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the Rest
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 of the world
shows
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show
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 the same
indicator
.
However
, for Japan's export
markets
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markets,
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 the pattern is reversed,
indicator
 in
this
 term
is
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stayed by practically as many
last
year
 as six
years
 ago.
Markets
 in Mexico added about 2 billion
dollar
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dollars
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 and The European Union market's income for
last
year
is
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was
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 the same
Mexico's
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as Mexico's
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 income 6
years
 ago. It is worth noticing that, in each market earnings move upward.
Australia
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Australian
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 and Hong Kong exchange's benefit six
years
 ago was the same,
whatever
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although
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last
year
's
indicator
show
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showed
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 that
earnings
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the earnings
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 of Australia
slightly
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were slightly
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 more than
markets
 in Hong Kong.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indicator, markets, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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