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Many teenagers now have their own Smartphones. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

In
this
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 day and age, technological advancement has been growing all over the world. Many people now have smartphones, and so are
teenagers
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.
This
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 phenomenon leads to pros and cons in society, and
this
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 essay will explain both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 topic.
To begin
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 with,
teenagers
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 can gain two advantages by owning phone devices, which are improving their educational
skills
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 and social
skills
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.
Firstly
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,
teenagers
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 at
school
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 can properly access additional materials by browsing the relevant academic sources on the internet.
For instance
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, pupils can search the visualization of atomic theory by using virtual reality (VR) features for a deep understanding of chemistry subject.
Secondly
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, the students can easily connect and relate with others who have the same interests or hobbies via social media, either from their schools or another
school
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. These factors will enhance their communication
skills
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 in their teenage,
as well as
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 enlarge their level of digital
skills
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 that can benefit them in the future. Despite all the instant benefits associated with smartphone usage, the distractions on students’ concentration and learning activity,
as well as
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 the decline in pupils’ social ability are some of the drawbacks. If
teenagers
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 bring their gadgets to
school
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, they may use their phones to do unrelated academic activities,
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 as playing virtual games or watching videos for entertainment.
As a consequence
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, the students may get distracted and lose concentration to study and absorb academic materials at
school
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, which has a high
impact
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 on students’ performances.
Moreover
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, the overuse of smartphones will discourage
teenagers
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’ social
skills
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due to
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teenagers
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 prioritizing online meetings rather than socialising with their peers in real life.
Finally
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, these disadvantages will
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 pupils’ performance
as well as
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teenagers
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’ interpersonal
skills
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.
To sum up
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, smartphone ownership by
teenagers
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
Therefore
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, we should raise awareness to optimise the positive
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 of using smartphones
as well as
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 avoid the adverse
impact
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 of gadgets overused.

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