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The graph below gives information about the U.S. government's spending on research between 1980 and 2008.

The graph below gives information about the U.S. government's spending on research between 1980 and 2008.
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The line graph illustrates the expenditures in billions of
dollars
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 by the American ministry for studies purposes in different fields of life like
health
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, space energy, general science, and
others
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 from 1980 to 2008.
Overall
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, a huge amount was spent on
health
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 and its line graph showed an upward trend.
Moreover
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, the funds were allocated to general science throughout the period.
To begin
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 with, at the start of the year 1980, approximately 8
billion
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dollars
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 were used for
health
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 purposes. It rose to about the maximum of 22
billion
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dollars
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 in 2004
then
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 it declined.
Whereas
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, in the case of general science, there were little fluctuations in spending from 1980 to 2000 from 2.5 to a maximum of 5
billion
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dollars
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.
Furthermore
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, it showed constant spending up to 2008.
In addition
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 to
this
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, space, energy and
others
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 showed slight variation but at the starting year 1980, the spending on all three was within the range of 5 to 7
billion
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dollars
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. And fluctuated within it upto 2004. The exceptional case is with the energy and space increased
while
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others
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 decreased.
To conclude
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, the spending was increased on the search of
health
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 sectors
while
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 the
others
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 remained the same.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, health, others, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • funding levels
  • government expenditure
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • inflation-adjusted dollars
  • historic highs/lows
  • research grants
  • public investment
  • financial resources
  • sector-specific spending
  • economic downturn
  • national priorities
  • scientific advancement
  • fiscal policy
  • economic stimulus
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