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The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million

The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million
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The table displays information about
underground
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the underground
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railway
system
 in
London
,
Paris
, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles
such
 as opening data, length of route, and
passengers
 a year.
Overall
,
London
,
Paris
, and Tokyo have the most used underground
railway
 systems by
passengers
 compared to their counterparts.
London
 has the oldest and the longest underground
railway
system
 by far. In 1863, the longest underground
railway
system
 opened in
London
 with 394 kilometers and
this
 transportation
using
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was used
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 by almost 800
million
passengers
 per year. The population of
railway
 users is nearly 1200
million
 individuals in
Paris
, the
railway
system
in
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apply
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there set in 1900 and
approximately
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is approximately
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 200
kilometers
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kilometres
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 now. The underground in Tokyo opened later than
Paris
' and
London
's;
nevertheless
,
its
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it was
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 used by 1927
million
passengers
 per year. The
railway
system
 in Washington DC
established
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was established
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 in 1976
which
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it
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 is 126
kilometers
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kilometres
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lenght
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long
 and it is used by roughly 150
million
 people. Kyoto's and Los Angeles' railways
set
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are
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 relatively new and they
used
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are used
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 by 45 and 50
million
passengers
 respectively. Kyoto's underground
system
 is the shortest compared to other cities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, system, london, paris, passengers, million with synonyms.
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