We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

For the past few
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experts all around the world
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speaking up on the influence of massive automation in production processes and artificial intelligence's impact on the future society.
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benefits and competing with other countries by developing more and more advanced technologies, political leaders often disregard the consequences that technological disruption could bring upon us. Or at least, they
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an idea of how
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would work even in the
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future. There are
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of fictional scenarios about robots taking over and enslaving human beings. But in my opinion, the problem is,
on the contrary
, in human beings having machines that unconditionally obey their masters.
For example
, if we survey all the military conflicts in history we probably won'
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find any without war crimes committed. It's caused by a simple human nature, since we are not able to control our emotions in a way that,
for instance
,
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engineer can control his code. Imagine for a second a world where soldiers are replaced by robots, that are set
according to
the international humanitarian law and Geneva convention. They would never commit massacres and kill the innocent, they would be able to perfectly detect the enemy and destroy it. And now if we imagine that
such
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of a merciless psychopath dictator, the result probably wouldn'
t
be so utopian.
Besides
people's vicious intentions, we
also
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ethics when it comes to artificial intelligence. It's not a secret, that self-driving cars are already a thing in the industry.
This
regime
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a way better safety for
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and his passengers. It has been proven by plenty of tests that have demonstrated to the whole world that millions of people don'
t
have to die
due to
car accidents anymore. If the government embraced these changes to another level and reformed the public transportation system it would be truly revolutionary.
However
, when it comes to the "trolley problem" we will need to input some moral values into the code. Does the car always
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to save the driver's life, even at
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of others? These are the moments where we will need some philosophical background. I personally believe that the exampled controversial questions can be solved if more people are encouraged to accept the changes.
This
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tend to consider dependence on computers to be a good thing rather than something suspicious. If we can reduce
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number of deaths with new technologies
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this
is exactly what we are supposed to do. We shouldn'
t
worry so much about being replaced and our jobs being taken but about human lives and ways to increase the quality of it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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