In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

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Some people believe that private tutoring at
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is more beneficial because of its ability to offer more attention and a better environment for studies. Despite
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believe that the contemporary
schools
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, the specialists and infrastructure attuned
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education, cannot be duplicated at
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and is a far better choice. The biggest advantage of
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home oriented
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training is that it offers focused learning and less distracting.
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ratio is
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in
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, which means that
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can not
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undivided attention to every
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education provides
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increased guidance to students which helps in clearing their doubts easily to understand difficult subjects.
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, they are less distracted at home because children are known to lose their concentration easily, like chatting with others and using mobiles in class, if they are not consistently monitored by the
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; which, is again, not feasible for
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to do so in classes with a large number of pupils.
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, in spite of
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traditional
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are still superior compared to private tutoring and
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of
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cannot be replicated at home. What
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mean, is that it is financially burdensome for parents to use all the technology and techniques of edification employed at
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, the libraries at school have
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of
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study materials which will be an expensive pursuit for parents to provide the same at
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because of their financial constraints.
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, parents cannot match the skills of
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who have
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years of experience and are
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in using
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sophisticated tools of teaching. In conclusion, It's true that
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tutoring at
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is less disruptive and gives more attention to kids, but skilled educators and facilities at traditional education institutes
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the benefits.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social development
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Curriculum
  • Pedagogy
  • Diversity
  • Structured learning
  • Professional educators
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Real-world challenges
  • Cultural exposure
  • Societal norms
  • Homeschooling
  • Peer relationships
  • Skill acquisition
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