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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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A few years from now, printed
books
 and newspaper sales will be stopped
due to
 the low interest of
people
 because
people
 can read everything online for free. I think that statement is not true since printed
books
 have more essential meaning and sometimes you will have to pay for a subscription if you want to read full premium content online. Undoubtedly, there will still be numerous
people
 that still love the feeling of touching the paper
while
 reading or even smelling the yellowing book pages. These small things will somehow make reading on printed paper more interesting and more enjoyable.
For instance
, there is a creditable journal stating that having a good emotion
while
 reading, will result in more easeness in understanding the context.
Furthermore
, even though many online sources offer free newspapers and
books
, sometimes it is just the demo version and
people
 will need to pay for a subscription later if they want to continue reading it.
As well as
 that, there will
also
 be some websites that do not require their user to subscribe, but by that means, they just can read some standard content and can not access the premium content. In conclusion, by some years
from
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, there will be a huge decrease in printed
books
 and newspaper sales because
people
 can read anything online. Even so, there will still be some
people
 who will buy printed
books
 and newspapers because of the feelings they feel when touching them and the comfort of printed paper.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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