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Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Chris,

#minutes #friend #holiday #destination #place #food #addresses #chris
Dear Chris, I hope you are doing good.I am writing to you today to answer your question about the holiday destination. As you know I visited Sevilla
last
 spring, and I really had a good time .
That is
 the reason why I want to recommend it to you. I stayed in a nice and cosy hotel in the centre called Sunrise, it is
also
 affordable.
In addition
, it has a pool and a terrace,which makes the experience remarkable.
Moreover
, it is close to the city's historical buildings and gardens, which made it easy for me to visit without needing to take public transportation.I
also
 had a great time in the bar down the street owing to their good vibe. I think you can do the same by visiting the historical sites
such
 as Alcazar and Plaza Espana.
Also
, I totally recommend trying the local food because it is simply delicious.They have a variety of fresh seafood and paella. I am looking forward to hearing from you. yours lovingly, Katty.
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task response
Address the recipient's request more thoroughly and mention specific activities or aspects of the destination that would appeal to your friend. Consider expanding on the reasons for recommending the destination.
coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a clear structure with a proper introduction, body, and conclusion. Organize the ideas into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific aspect of the holiday recommendation.
lexical resource
The letter demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and appropriate use of language for the task. To improve, consider adding more descriptive and vivid language to create a more engaging letter.
grammatical range
The letter showcases a good command of grammar and a varied use of sentence structures. To enhance, strive for more complex sentence structures and precise language use.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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