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You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. •Describe the vacation spot you have chosen . •Explain how you plan to spend time there. •Invite your friend to join on your vacation

#vacation #friend #•describe #spot #•explain #plan #time #•invite
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Hello Sarah, How's it going? Hope you're doing well. I'm writing
this
 letter because I am planning to go somewhere to spend the holidays . You know very well, mostly I like hilly areas .One thing is that snow is coming, so so decided to go to China , where we can enjoy everything. We will stay in a Dragon Hotel because they provide all types of facilities
as well as
 it is luxury.
Moreover
, there are numerous places where we can go and enjoy together .
For example
: temples and parks and we can go to restaurants to eat special things .We will stay there for three days I invite you to join me , because I know you
also
 like to travel a lot and want to explore new places. I will be waiting for your response , so that I can book tickets . Lots of love, Sabin
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The second paragraph should focus solely on describing the vacation spot and reasons for choosing it, while another paragraph can elaborate on planned activities.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing. Start a new paragraph for each new idea or topic to improve readability and organization.
task achievement
Fully develop your ideas by providing more detail. In the invitation to your friend, elaborate on why their presence would make the vacation more enjoyable, for example, by sharing past travel experiences or highlighting activities you know they would enjoy.
task achievement
Check for and correct grammatical errors and typos to make your writing clearer. Remember, accuracy in language use enhances the effectiveness of your message.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will improve the flow of your letter and make your intentions and excitement more contagious.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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