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The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
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The above information has described the sales
volume
 from different regions and
share
 prices for Coco-Cola, For the sales
volume
, the pie chart depicts the
overall
Coco-Cola'
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Coco-Cola
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 unit case
volume
 and
divides
Wrong verb form
is divided
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 into regions
such
 as Asia, Europe, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East, Latin America and North America. The result shows that the total sales
volume
 is 17.1 billion
while
 North America, with
the
Correct article usage
a
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 record of 30.4%, demonstrates the highest percentage among the other regions.
In addition
, the Africa and Middle East which only
score
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scored
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 7.0%
becomes
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became
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 the
region
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regions
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 having the least
Coca-Cola
volume
. For the
share
 price, the graph contributes
the
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to the
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 trend of
Coca-Cola
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Coca-Cola's
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share
 price from 1996 to 2001. The results imply that
Coca-Cola
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the Coca-Cola
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share
 price curve is unpredictable and floating.
While
 it
increases
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increased
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 from 1996 to 1997 and
decreases
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decreased
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 in the middle year of 1997,
yet
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apply
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it
attains
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attained
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 its maximum point at around $80 in 1998.
Neertheless
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Nevertheless
, it continues to drop and attain its lowest record around $48 nearly 2000.
Although
Coca-Cola
starts
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started
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 to rebound
but
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apply
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it still
end
Wrong verb form
ended
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 up with a
deceasing
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decreasing
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 curve.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words volume, share, coca-cola with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • highlight
  • fluctuations
  • correlation
  • trends
  • overview
  • analysis
  • interpretation
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