The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
The above information has described the sales
volume
from different regions and Use synonyms
share
prices for Coco-Cola, For the sales Use synonyms
volume
, the pie chart depicts the Use synonyms
overall
Linking Words
Coco-Cola'
unit case Change noun form
Coco-Cola
volume
and Use synonyms
divides
into regions Wrong verb form
is divided
such
as Asia, Europe, Africa and Linking Words
Middle
East, Latin America and North America. The result shows that the total sales Correct article usage
the Middle
volume
is 17.1 billion Use synonyms
while
North America, with Linking Words
the
record of 30.4%, demonstrates the highest percentage among the other regions. Correct article usage
a
In addition
, the Africa and Middle East which only Linking Words
score
7.0% Wrong verb form
scored
becomes
the Wrong verb form
became
region
having the least Fix the agreement mistake
regions
Coca-Cola
Use synonyms
volume
. For the Use synonyms
share
price, the graph contributes Use synonyms
the
trend of Change preposition
to the
Use synonyms
Coca-Cola
Change noun form
Coca-Cola's
share
price from 1996 to 2001. The results imply that Use synonyms
Use synonyms
Coca-Cola
Correct article usage
the Coca-Cola
share
price curve is unpredictable and floating. Use synonyms
While
it Linking Words
increases
from 1996 to 1997 and Wrong verb form
increased
decreases
in the middle year of 1997, Wrong verb form
decreased
yet
it Correct word choice
apply
attains
its maximum point at around $80 in 1998. Wrong verb form
attained
Neertheless
, it continues to drop and attain its lowest record around $48 nearly 2000. Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
Although
Linking Words
Coca-Cola
Use synonyms
starts
to rebound Wrong verb form
started
but
it still Remove the conjunction
apply
end
up with a Wrong verb form
ended
deceasing
curve.Correct your spelling
decreasing
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