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The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
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The pie chart shows
total
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the total
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 sales of Coca-Cola in
the
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apply
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five different areas (North
America
, Latin
America
, Europe, Asia, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East).
In addition
, the line graph illustrates
share
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the share
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price
 trend of Coca-Cola from 1996 to 2001. The sales data
presented
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is presented
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 in
percetages
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percentages
percentage
,
while
share
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sharing
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price
 data
in
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is in
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 dollars ($). In general, North
America
 showed the biggest quantity of total sales,
while
 Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
was
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were
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 the lowest.
Furthermore
, from 1996 to 2001, the company showed a
fluctuative
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fluctuating
fluctuation
 trend in the
share
price
 with the highest
price
was
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being
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on
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in
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 1998. North
America
 had the biggest
sale
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sales
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 with
total
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the total
a total
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 percentage of 30.4%, followed by Latin
America
 and Europe with total percentages of 25.7% and 20.5%
perspectively
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respectively
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.
Conversely
, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East had the lowest quantity of
sale
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sales
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 with
the
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a
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 percentage of 7%.
Furthermore
, the line graph showed
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a fluctuative
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fluctuative
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fluctuating
 trend
of
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in
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share's
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share
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price
 from 1996 to 2001 with the highest peak of around $80
on
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in
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 1998,
while
 the lowest
price
 was
on
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in
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 1996 with
total
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a total
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 of $35.
Overall
,
share
price
 showed an increase from $35 in 1996 to $60 in 2021.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, share, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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