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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer
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The graphs provide the results of a survey conducted on adult education about the reasons why adults pursue
further
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 studies,
along with
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 how the
fund
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funds
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 for
the
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education should be distributed.
Overall
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, the survey reveals that adults pursue
further
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 studies mainly
due to
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 their interest in the subject matter and the need to acquire certifications.
In addition
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, the distribution of the costs
fairly
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each
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 other. The primary reason for adults pursuing
further
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 studies is their interest in the subject, with 40
respondents
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 indicating
this
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 as their motivation.
Additionally
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, 38
respondents
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 mentioned the need to acquire certifications as a driving factor. Other reasons for pursuing
further
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 education include its benefits for their current job (22
respondents
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), increasing career opportunities (20
respondents
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), and personal enjoyment of studying (20
respondents
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). A smaller proportion of
respondents
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 (12) expressed the desire for career switch flexibility,
while
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 only 9
respondents
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 mentioned the opportunity to meet new people as a reason The majority of the
respondents
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 (40%) indicated that the costs should be borne by
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 themselves. Followed by 35% of the
respondents
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 believed that the fund should be covered by employers,
while
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 25% felt that taxpayers should contribute.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words respondents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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