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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In time to come, not a single individual will purchase hard copy
newspapers
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nor
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books
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 since everyone will be able to
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 all they want through the internet without having to pay any amount. I strongly agree with
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 since
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internet
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 makes reading materials readily available at all places and all time with our phones and computers and
then
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people
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 are trying to halt the cutting of
trees
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 to make
papers
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 and
books
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. To start with over the past two decades, science and technology
has
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 made
books
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 and
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news
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newspapers
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papers
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 readily available to
people
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 through their computers and phones which they can have
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access
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 to through
internet
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 connection, with
this
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 new information technology, each person can relax at the comfort of his own space and be able to read
books
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 or
news
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 worldwide without having to walk all the way to the library, a book shop or a
news
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 paper shop to make purchase, with the ease that
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 initiative comes with,
people
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 are gradually subscribing to that idea, and the reading of printed
books
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 and
newspapers
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 is gradually declining,
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 many shops where
news
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papers
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 and
books
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 used to be sold have been converted to grocery shops since they record low sales. Now
just
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with a click on your smart
phone
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 there are many social media platforms that
supplies
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 a lot of juicy
news
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 with pictures and videos,
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 is interesting and fascinating
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 it glues the attention of the reader and makes
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then
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them
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 not return to physical
newspapers
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.
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 to the above, cutting
of
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trees
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 to produce
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papers
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paper
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 for making
books
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 and
graphic
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graphics
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 has been frowned
against
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 and all nations are trying to put a halt to that. The manufacturing of
books
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require
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 the cutting down of
trees
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 which destroys our green forest, making a lot of animals
loose
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 their habitats,
initially
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 even though a lot of
people
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 did not like the idea of cutting
trees
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 to make
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papers
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paper
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, little did they know that
this
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 process can be put to and end with the use technology. In other to preserve the green forest, conservatives are promoting the idea of paperless reading, as it is
more easy
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 and reduces deforestation.
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, with more
people
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 reading online, few
books
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 are
buying
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 produced,there's little demand for paper, and the companies producing
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then
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them
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 are likely to go into different businesses since their initial business is becoming less profitable. In conclusion, reading printed
books
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 and
newspapers
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 is projected to come to an end in years to come, because everyone prefers to read online,I totally agree with
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 notion and the essay explained that
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née
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new
 initiative is easily accessible and reduces the need for cutting down
trees
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 to produce paper for making
books
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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