The graph below shows how elderly people in the united states spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the united states spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
The line graph below shows the number in the proportion of elderly
people
spending various free time activities in the US from the 1980s to 2010s. In general, the most popular seniors’ hobby was watching TV
while
the least common entertaining event for
this
age group was surfing the Internet. Starting with, in the 1990s watching TV was very likely for 60 per
cent
of grey-heads, and
this
upward trend was unchangeable during the 2000s. In 2000 the proportions declined marginally.
Secondly
, there was a dramatic rise with no fluctuation in hiking from 20% in the 1980s to over 80% in the 2010s.
On the other hand
, other categories displayed more rush changes.
People
who spent their vacant time Reading and Surfing the Internet counted around 30 per
cent
and 6 per
cent
, respectively. By 1990 the number of elderly
people
increased by 10 per
cent
, but in the next decade, it plummeted by 20 per
cent
.
However
, surfing the internet gained popularity among the elderly from the 1980s to the 2000s, as the proportions grew slightly by approximately 10 per
cent
. Between the 2000s and 2010s both of the latter categories’ percentage of
people
rocketed to 60% for “reading” and 50% for “surfing the internet” activities.
Finally
, only theatre showed a downward tendency, starting at 50% of spectators and finishing at 30% by 1990 but
then
growing to 45% by the 2010s.
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