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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
due to
 the high
crime
 rate the system of
punishment
 should be changed to deter
crime
.
While
 some people believe that there should be the same
punishment
 for each type of
crime
, others claim that the penalty should be considered taking into account the details of individual
crime
.
This
 paper will attempt to examine those views. On the one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on the society. Individuals will know that there is no way to get away from the
punishment
, even with the best defence strategy. At the same moment,
this
 system may work imperfectly. First of all, the
punishment
 may be unfair
due to
 the neglecting of the circumstances and
secondly
, in countries with a high rate of political persecution, it will be easier to make up a
crime
 to get rid of the political activists.
This
 type of system works in Thailand for drug offences and shows a high level of effectiveness. On the other side, taking the circumstances of a
crime
 may consume more time and financial resources, but the fair results should not be neglected. An understanding of the criminal’s motivation and details of life may save the years of life of an individual or consider a life sentence. The case of the Hachaturyan sisters shows that the penalty should be considered only after reflecting all circumstances. In 2018 the case was qualified as murder conspiracy, with a penalty of 8 to 20 years in prison. Still, the trial details of the sisters’ lives proved the presence of sexual abuse and violence in their family and now,
this
 is killing in self-defence. In my
opinion
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 an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. To lower the time and money consumption of trials, for the second trial an offender should pay if he or she wants to argue the sentence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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