‏The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. ‏Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

‏The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

‏Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides information about the variation of four different technology companies in terms of stock
prices
in a given period ranging between 2011
to
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and
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2016.
Overall
, it can be seen that Facebook showed a steady increase,
while
Yahoo declined. Meanwhile, Apple
prices
were
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notably fluctuated,
whereas
Google never changed. Throughout the 5
years
period, Facebook illustrated a gradual growth of stock
prices
starting from 5000 in 2011 that kept rising by about 2000-5000 each year until it reached 20000 by 2016. Despite starting
at
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a similar footing to Facebook, Yahoo kept decreasing slowly until it went below 5000 in the
last
three
years
.
On the other hand
, Apple demonstrated a wild fluctuation in stock
prices
, starting from under 5000 in 2011, which
then
jumped significantly to higher than 30000 in 2012. After that, it dropped dramatically reaching about 7000 in 2013 and stayed changeable between 5000-10000 throughout the rest of the
years
. Google did not change with 0 stocks in all
years
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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