Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Some believe the invention of
computer
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the computer
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should be considered as the most important industry of the
last
century
,
although
there is another idea that mentions other
inventions
had more capability to be known as the best. I am in agreement with the first group. The invention of
computer
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in the
last
century
can be accounted as a revolution in science and more than
it
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that
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, in human
life
. The utilities and abilities of
this
newborn technology created new branches of science like
internet
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the internet
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,
Internatinal
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International
technology,
computer
sciences, video games and unlimited fields which changed and promoted human
life
to a higher level in comparison to the past history. The growth of new sciences which derived from
computer
science would create so many new jobs and make
the
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apply
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life
easier for people. Nowadays living without
computer
involvement is unbearable and to some extent impossible.
However
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there is another opinion which says we had more important
inventions
in the
last
century
. Some suggest
cinema
as
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is
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the most influential
occurance
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occurrence
in
the
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apply
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man
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life
and mention it should be accounted as the most surprising phenomenon of the
21th
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century
.
Cinema
changed human
life
as
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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did,
however
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however,
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cinema
came
to
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into
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existence
about
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apply
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more than years before
computer
production,
then
Cinema
had more effect on human
life style
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lifestyle
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. Other groups
belives
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believe
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more in other
inventions
like vaccinations or spacecrafts and other
magnificant
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magnificent
scientific manufactures and
had
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have
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their own logical reasons. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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21th
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the 21st
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century
was the scientific and technological era that averted human
life
image, and so many
inventions
were produced. In my opinion, among all
inventions
,
computer
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the computer
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had
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has
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the most important value and can be seen as the mother of everyday new
inventions
,
although
other
inventions
had
such
an enormous impact on human
life
features,
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the computer
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computer
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computer's
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role in
life
outweigh
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outweighs
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other
inventions
. 50 years before
computer
production,
then
Cinema
had more effect on human
life style
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lifestyle
show examples
. Other groups
belives
Verb problem
believe
show examples
more in other
inventions
like vaccinations or spacecrafts and other
magnificant
Correct your spelling
magnificent
scientific manufactures and
had
Wrong verb form
have
show examples
their own logical reasons. In
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
show examples
21th
Correct word choice
the 21st
show examples
century
was the scientific and technological era that averted human
life
image, and so many
inventions
were produced. In my opinion, among all
inventions
,
computer
Change the article
the computer
show examples
had
Wrong verb form
has
show examples
the most important value and can be seen as the mother of everyday new
inventions
,
although
other
inventions
had
such
an enormous impact on human
life
features,
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the computer
show examples
computer
Change noun form
computer's
show examples
role in
life
outweigh
Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
show examples
other
inventions
.
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