Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some believe the invention of
computer
should be considered as the most important industry of the Change the article
the computer
last
century
, although
there is another idea that mentions other inventions
had more capability to be known as the best. I am in agreement with the first group. The invention of computer
in the Change the article
the computer
last
century
can be accounted as a revolution in science and more than it
, in human Correct pronoun usage
that
life
. The utilities and abilities of this
newborn technology created new branches of science like internet
, Correct article usage
the internet
Internatinal
technology, Correct your spelling
International
computer
sciences, video games and unlimited fields which changed and promoted human life
to a higher level in comparison to the past history. The growth of new sciences which derived from computer
science would create so many new jobs and make the
Correct article usage
apply
life
easier for people. Nowadays living without computer
involvement is unbearable and to some extent impossible. However
there is another opinion which says we had more important Add a comma
However,
inventions
in the last
century
. Some suggest cinema
as
the most influential Correct your spelling
is
occurance
in Correct your spelling
occurrence
the
Correct article usage
apply
man
Change noun form
man's
life
and mention it should be accounted as the most surprising phenomenon of the 21th
Change the ending
21st
century
. Cinema
changed human life
as Add an article
the computer
computer
did, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
however
Add the comma(s)
however,
cinema
came to
existence Change preposition
into
about
more than years before Change preposition
apply
computer
production, then
Cinema
had more effect on human life style
. Other groups Correct your spelling
lifestyle
belives
more in other Verb problem
believe
inventions
like vaccinations or spacecrafts and other magnificant
scientific manufactures and Correct your spelling
magnificent
had
their own logical reasons. In Wrong verb form
have
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
21th
Correct word choice
the 21st
century
was the scientific and technological era that averted human life
image, and so many inventions
were produced. In my opinion, among all inventions
, computer
Change the article
the computer
had
the most important value and can be seen as the mother of everyday new Wrong verb form
has
inventions
, although
other inventions
had such
an enormous impact on human life
features, Correct article usage
the computer
computer
role in Change noun form
computer's
life
outweigh
other Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
inventions
. 50 years before computer
production, then
Cinema
had more effect on human life style
. Other groups Correct your spelling
lifestyle
belives
more in other Verb problem
believe
inventions
like vaccinations or spacecrafts and other magnificant
scientific manufactures and Correct your spelling
magnificent
had
their own logical reasons. In Wrong verb form
have
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
21th
Correct word choice
the 21st
century
was the scientific and technological era that averted human life
image, and so many inventions
were produced. In my opinion, among all inventions
, computer
Change the article
the computer
had
the most important value and can be seen as the mother of everyday new Wrong verb form
has
inventions
, although
other inventions
had such
an enormous impact on human life
features, Correct article usage
the computer
computer
role in Change noun form
computer's
life
outweigh
other Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
inventions
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