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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, an array of masses is living abroad for various reasons.
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, they
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 many difficulties with speaking another
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, and
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 brings crucial
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, whether social or practical. I strongly agree with
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 notion and in
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 with, the major social problem that occurs
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 barriers is with making friends
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 because friendship with
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 public needs more than just a basic grasp of the native
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 a lack of good communication in foreign languages,
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 difficulty in making sound relationships with their neighbours and colleagues, which makes them feel isolated and
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 may cause mental problems like depression and anxiety.
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, immigrants who have difficulty understanding
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English
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 feel overwhelmed with English information, are unable to follow any public
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 or any group conversation
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 and seem helpless to understand their cultural values.
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,
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also
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confront
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 many practical challenges. One of the major
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travelling. Since bus stop signs are written in the native
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public with problems in the local
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 do not understand where to get off the bus.
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, immigrants
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 difficulties in healthcare and legal services.
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 weak communication,
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 themselves unable to explain their diseases to the doctor or any legal injustice they are facing to their lawyer.
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, in China, all the road signposts are written in
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Chinese
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, and the
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 they use for official purposes is only Chinese, so immigrants who lack good knowledge of
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Chinese
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aspect
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, I believe that
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encounter
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 many social and practical
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 in other countries
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 less proficiency in
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local
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, and the government should provide suitable support to them for tackling
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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