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The chart below shows the foreign visitors numbers in 3 Vietnamese resorts from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the foreign visitors numbers in 3 Vietnamese resorts from 2000 to 2006.
The bar chart delineates the number of offshore
tourists
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 in different
resorts
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 in Vietnam between 2000 and 2006.
Overall
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, the
resorts
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 in Phu Quoc and Mui Ne experienced an upward trend with the exception of Danang.
Additionally
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,despite having the lowest data in its first appearance, Mui Ne's
resorts
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 were far superior compared to others
at the end
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 of the period. Breaking the figures down into greater detail, it can be seen that there was an increase in Phu Quoc's
resorts
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 from 500,000
visitors
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 to 600,000
visitors
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 between 2000 and 2002 before slightly going down to 4500
tourists
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 in 2004. After that,
this
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 statistic saw a minor increase back up to just over 600,000
visitors
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 in 2006. Concurrently, in the first recorded data, the
resorts
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 in Mui Ne witnessed a steady increase in figures from exactly 300,000
tourists
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then
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 on to approximately 750,000
visitors
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 before quadrupling to around 950,000 a the end of the timescale.
However
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 there was an opposite trend with the
resorts
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 in Danang, the number of
tourists
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 commenced with a high of 900,000
then
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this
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 category experienced a sustainable decline to 500,000
visitors
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 from around 650,000 by 2002.
Subsequently
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, the number of
tourists
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 in Dannag hit its lowest point at just below 290,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, resorts, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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