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In recent years, young people in many countries have chosen to live by themselves. What are the reasons and is it a positive or negative for the development of society?

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In recent times, many young generations in the world prefer to live separately from their parents. I believe it has
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 positive impact and
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this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, the most reason is because young people need more private space for themselves. It makes them free
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 their hobbies
such
 as reading books, playing music, or even doing sports regularly.
However
, if they live with their family, they will be disturbed frequently, preventing them from enjoying their time.
Furthermore
, some individuals fail to get along well with their family members.
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, many children in a family
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 uncomfortable
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 their
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 their parents and prefer to share their
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 with their friends. It can cause
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 lack of communication between them. Some parents are
also
 judging the lifestyle of their children and it makes the younger generation tend to move out and live by themselves.
Moreover
, the increasing number of
this
 trend can be beneficial from personal life perspectives. When living alone, they learn to manage their household and professional workload at the same time.
For example
, They have to cook food, wash clothes and do all other household
while
 pursuing a job or studies. People who are willing to live alone in large cities can explore better job opportunities, which is simply because they can move around anywhere and anytime. In conclusion, young people can take the positive impact from
this
 phenomenon
such
 as personal growth and it can make them more independent.
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