The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.
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The diagram compares the
food
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price index with the average price of a barrel of
oil
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over the world between 2000 and 2011.
It is clear that
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there was an
overall
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upward trend for both global
prices
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of
food
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and
oil
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over a period of 11 years.
Furthermore
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, both
prices
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increased very
similarly
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and their correlation was about 93% It is clear from the graph that the figures for both increased slightly in the six first years.
However
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,
oil
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cost rose sharply from 60
dollars
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in 2007 and peaked at 130
dollars
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in 2008 and
as a consequence
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, the
food
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cost
also
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followed but did not peak until later. But suddenly,
prices
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of
oil
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fell to 40
dollars
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in the next year and
food
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was 140 points compared with 221 points in the previous year. In the
last
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two years, the
prices
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grew again but the
food
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cost reached a peak of nearly 240 points
this
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time
while
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the
oil
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was around 100
dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, oil, prices, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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