Advertising has become part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising has a positive impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that advertising plays an integral part in our daily

lives

, bringing

along with

it benefits for society as a whole. Personally, I can neither agree nor disagree with

this

statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that advertising has a positive impact on our

lives

. One of the main reasons for

this

is how advertising provides information to the public, allowing us as

consumers

to have a wider range of choices of products to consume. Providing the mass population with detailed info on each good they can possibly purchase, allows

consumers

to make a rational decision for themselves after weighing what they lose and gain from

this

This

not only respects consumer rights but promotes merit goods consumption which provides positive externalities for society.

For example

, a case study by Harvard Business School has shown that after a successful marketing campaign for vegetables and healthy eating, the obesity rate in America has dropped by 10%, reducing pressure on healthcare services in the country.

On the other hand

, I disagree with the viewpoint that advertising has a positive impact on our daily

lives

This

is because advertising can manipulate people's behaviours to benefit a third party. With the rise of huge tech companies, social media have become a huge part of our

lives

and as

such

the amount of data these companies have on us is monstrous. Through the analysis of

this

data, these firms can sell our personal info to advertisers, allowing them to design advertisements that directly target us.

Due to

this

, we essentially get controlled by the ads and make irrational choices which may impact our

lives

later on. As an example, research from Johns Hopkins University pointed out that with the data provided by tech companies, advertisement becomes 3 times more effective at persuading

consumers

than before. In conclusion,

although

advertisements do have their benefits as they provide

consumers

with the freedom of choice, I'm convinced that in

this

modern day of technology, advertisements are specifically designed to manipulate our actions without our consent, harming the world in the process.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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