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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how many movies were produced in five nations, namely A,
B
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,
C
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, D and
E
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 from 2007 to 2009.
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,
country
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 A registered the highest
numbers
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number
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 of
films
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 in 3 years compared to that of other remaining countries. Another noteworthy feature is that
while
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 there was an upward tendency of film
number
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numbers
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 in
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country
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countries
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B
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,
C
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 and
E
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, a downward trend was seen in
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 of
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country
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countries
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 A and D, between 2007 and 2009. In 2007, about 50, 8 and 9
films
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 were produced in
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country
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countries
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B
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,
C
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 and
E
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, respectively. When it comes to
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B
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,
this
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 figure rose to 70.
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, we can
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 notice that there was a slight increase in
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C
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 and
E
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 with 19 and 11
films
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, respectively, in the year 2009. A
contrast
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 trend was seen in
country
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 A. In 2007,
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 A produced approximately 88 movies.
This
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 figure remained stable in 2008 before dropping slightly to 80
films
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 in the year 2009. The number of
films
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 produced in
country
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 D
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. There were about 15
films
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 produced in 2007. After that,
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 number decreased to about 9
films
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 before rising again to reach about 13 movies by the year 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words b, c, e, country, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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