The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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The line chart shows how many people

visit

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a particular Caribbean

island

between

from

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2010 to 2017. In 2010, the number of

visitors

staying on

island

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the island

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was larger than

visitors

staying on cruise ships between 0.75

millions

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and 0.25

millions

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, and the total number of

visitors

was 1 million.

Visitors

staying on

island

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the island

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stayed stable at 0.75

millions

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from 2010 to 2011, rose to 1.5

millions

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million

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for 2 years, and still remained stable at 1.5

millions

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million

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between 2013 and 2015. Tourists staying on

island

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the island

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slightly dropped to 1.25

millions

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million

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in 2016 and

then

increased to 1.5

millions

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in 2017.

However

, fewer

visitors

staying on cruise ships had some fluctuations between 2010 and 2013, the figure grew considerably to 2

millions

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for 4 years.

Overall

, the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean

island

experienced an increasing trend for seven years

Visitors

staying on cruise ships increased dramatically

untill

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until

above

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the

people

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number of people

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staying on

island

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an island

the island

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in 2017.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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