the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed

the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed
The table expresses the
police
budget
in the given years and the pie chart displays how the money was spent. The
figure
for
national
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the national
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government accounted for 175.5m and it was highest in 2017. Other sources accounted for 38m. It and the
figure
for local taxes had a big
gab
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gap
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of 53.2m.
Total
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The total
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for the
police
budget
was 304.7m. In 2018, the
police
budget
of
national
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the national
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government had
n
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a
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slight increase of 2.5m.
By contrast
, local taxes went up to 102.3m. The total
budget
was 318.6m In 2017, 75% money
spent
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was spent
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salaries
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on salaries
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. The percentage of buildings and transport was 17% and it and the
figure
for
salaries
had a big
gab
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gap
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of 58%. The lowest
figure
was technology, at 8%.
By contrast
, the
figure
for
salaries
decreased to 69% in 2018. Interestingly, Buildings and transport
was
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were
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the same percentage. The
figure
for technology increased to 14%. In brief,
all
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the
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police
budget
went up in 2017. The
figure
for
salaries
was the highest in 2017 and 2018.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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