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the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed

the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed
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The table expresses the
police
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budget
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 in the given years and the pie chart displays how the money was spent. The
figure
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 for
national
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the national
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 government accounted for 175.5m and it was highest in 2017. Other sources accounted for 38m. It and the
figure
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 for local taxes had a big
gab
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gap
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 of 53.2m.
Total
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The total
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 for the
police
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budget
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 was 304.7m. In 2018, the
police
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budget
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 of
national
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the national
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 government had
n
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a
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 slight increase of 2.5m.
By contrast
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, local taxes went up to 102.3m. The total
budget
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 was 318.6m In 2017, 75% money
spent
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was spent
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salaries
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on salaries
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. The percentage of buildings and transport was 17% and it and the
figure
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 for
salaries
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 had a big
gab
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gap
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 of 58%. The lowest
figure
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 was technology, at 8%.
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, the
figure
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 for
salaries
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 decreased to 69% in 2018. Interestingly, Buildings and transport
was
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were
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 the same percentage. The
figure
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 for technology increased to 14%. In brief,
all
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the
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police
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budget
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 went up in 2017. The
figure
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 for
salaries
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 was the highest in 2017 and 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, figure, m, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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