The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
The
line
graph demonstrates the causes of moving folks away to other major cities of a particular country between 2000 and 2015.
overall
, we can see, that the two main reasons would be employment and
study
and family or friends and relocating for
adventure
have a modest effect.
According to
the information that the
line
chart gives us,
study
and employment lines were increasing until 2010 but in 2015 the rate of people who moved away decreased and it reached the peak of the
study
line
which means both of them show a common number in 2015, about 87000.
However
, fewer individuals went to capital cities for life
due to
their families or friends, and
adventure
whilst they were going up to steady pace, and they show a similar proportion in 2010, which indicates a lower quantity of a few over 10000,
nevertheless
, in 2015 represent two different numbers, the
line
related to family and friend went up to around 22000 and the
adventure
line
raised to 15000.
To sum up
, we are informed that
study
and employment have a significant impact on moving people to big cities and relatives and
adventure
had a slight effect.
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  • relocation
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • educational facilities
  • vibrant lifestyle
  • healthcare access
  • medical services
  • social connections
  • infrastructure
  • transport facilities
  • data trends
  • survey results
  • capital city
  • allure
  • motivating factor
  • influencing
  • attracting
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • assessment
  • consideration
  • exploration
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