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The bar chart below gives the information about the average number of visitors in 4 other museums in London from June to October

The bar chart below gives the information about the average number of visitors in 4 other museums in London from June to October
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The chart illustrates the average footfall distributions in four distinct
museums
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 in London from June to October.
Overall
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, it is evident that all the
museums
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 received the highest number of visitors in August except for the Science
Museum
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.
In addition
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, the National
Museum
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 remained at the bottom in the popularity ranking throughout the period. Three out of four
museums
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 witnessed a dramatic increase in visitors in August. British
Museum
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's footfall has soared from just above 400
thousand
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 in July to over 700
thousand
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 in August. Meanwhile, the number of museumgoers to the History and National
Museum
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 grew by 200
thousand
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 a month, reaching 600
thousand
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 and around 380
thousand
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 in August, respectively.
In contrast
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, the figure for the Science
Museum
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 began at approximately 420
thousand
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 in June, dropped to 400
thousand
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 in July, and remained the same in August. It rose to 500
thousand
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 the following month but plummeted to 300
thousand
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 in October. The other three
museums
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also
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 experienced a decline in footfall after reaching a pinnacle in August; notably, the British
Museum
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 exhibited the steepest decline, plunging to nearly 260
thousand
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, less than half its August figure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museums, museum, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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