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In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some nations, following a vegetarian
diet
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 is becoming more popular.
Although
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 having a vegetarian
diet
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 can help to protect
animals
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, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because they do not incorporate all the nutrients they need. One benefit of not eating
meat
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 is that
animals
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 are being protected.
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 to say, if more
people
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 start opting to eat meals that do not include
meat
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, fewer
animals
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 will be tortured and killed.
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 is because
animals
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 are reproduced, kept in small and uncomfortable places, and
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 killed and sold to supermarkets and butchers for human consumption.
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, cow’s
meat
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 in Argentina is the basis of
people
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’s nutrition, so thousands of cows are reproduced and killed every year just for human consumption.
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, I believe that avoiding eating
meat
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 will not make a significant difference
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animals
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’ protection. One drawback of having a vegetarian
diet
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 is that the nutrients incorporated through
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diet
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 are insufficient.
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 is because
meat
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 has several vitamins and other important components,
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 as iron, that are very difficult to replace with fruits and vegetables. If
people
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 are not aware of
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 and do not visit a specialist, it can be dangerous and lead to several diseases.
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, many vegetarian
people
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 are
anemic
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 because of the lack of iron in their
diet
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, so they need to be supplemented with iron tablets.
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, I believe that having a healthy and complete
diet
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 is more important than any other thing. In conclusion,
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animals
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 can be protected if more
people
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 start following a vegetarian
diet
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, I believe that having a balanced
diet
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 with all the nutrients and vitamins that a person needs is far more important.
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, I consider that the drawbacks of a vegetarian
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 outweigh the benefits.
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task achievement
You need to present a clear position throughout your response; the conclusion must be consistent with the content argued in the body paragraphs.
task achievement
Aim for a more comprehensive approach by addressing both advantages and disadvantages with equal weight and analysis to fully respond to the question.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and topic-specific vocabulary to ensure clarity and cohesion within and between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Introduce clear main points in each paragraph and use examples that are directly supportive of your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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