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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart and table show the relation between income and working
hours
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 of each 4 jobs in the United Kingdom. Income is shown in
pounds
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, and working
hours
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 are shown in
hours
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph that
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salary
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the salary
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 of every profession slightly
grow
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grows
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 after three years of working. The average working time of all professions is nearly equal, except firefighters, who have the highest
hours
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 when compared to others. Considering the bar chart, the
police
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's starting income is slightly more than nurses, which is 21,000 and 18,000. When compared to the table,
police
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 have more two work
hours
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 than nurses, which is in the same way with
salary
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.
Police
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's salaries seem to increase at a higher rate than other jobs, which increased by 2,000
pounds
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 in three years
while
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 others' increased by only 1,000
pounds
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. For the next two careers, firefighters and underground drivers have more
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salary
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salaries
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 than
police
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 and nurses. For firefighters, their
salary
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, 40,000
pounds
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 in the starting year, is in line with the workload, which is beyond others, 55
hours
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.
In contrast
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, underground drivers have the least working
hours
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, 36
hours
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,
while
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 they earn the highest
salary
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, 50,000
pounds
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, pounds, salary, police with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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