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The graph below shows the total oil use 4 main consumers from 2009 to 2030

The graph below shows the total oil use 4 main consumers from 2009 to 2030
The line graph illustrates the amount of
oil
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 used by 4 regions: the US, Western
Europe
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 and
Japan
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,
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East over the period of 21 years (2009 – 2030).
Overall
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,
oil
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 usage in America is the highest during the period shown. The figure for the use of
oil
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 in the US, and Western
Europe
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 tends to decrease
while
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 the amount of
this
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 black gold in the
Middle
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 East and
China
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 increases slightly. In the year of 2009, the total
oil
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 use of
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East were the same, at 2
million
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 barrels per day. Meanwhile, the statistics of Western
Europe
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 and
Japan
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 were at around 4
million
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 and 10
million
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 respectively. 6 years later, the total
oil
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 consumption in the United States remained unchanged at only 10
million
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. The sum of
oil
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 usage in
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East rose minimally to about 3 and 2.5
million
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 each.
By contrast
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, there was a gradual decline in
oil
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 utilization in Western
Europe
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 and
Japan
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 by about 2
million
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. By 2030,
although
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 the figure for the use of
oil
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 in the US is predicted to fall significantly, it is still the highest among the 4 regions by more than 4
million
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. The
oil
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 usage in
China
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 is expected to decrease moderately to about 3
million
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. The
Middle
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 East is likely to have a constant rise in
this
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 time period and reach a peak of approximately 3
million
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. As previously, the amount of
oil
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 consumption in Western
Europe
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 and
Japan
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 has the tendency to drop to 2
million
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, europe, japan, china, middle, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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