The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

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The two maps provide information about changes taking place in a stationary shop between 2000 and at present.

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, it can be seen that the bookstore has been well developed with new additional features

such

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as a cafe and entertainment unit.

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with, in the old plan, fiction was located at the north

as well as

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northeast of the building.

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, the entertainment centre was located at the centre of the map,

however

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, non-fiction was found south of the building. The shop had an entrance at the west end of the building. Travel, new books and a service desk were

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available.

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, at present, additional features have been added to fiction at the north end,

moreover

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, a cafe can now be found located in the south. The entrance remained in the same position,

nonetheless

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,the location of non-fiction can now be accessed at the north-east. Three tables have been placed at the centre of the shop. Travel, new books and service desk remained in the same position.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

170 words

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