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The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
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The map illustrates the bookstore renovation from 2000 until
present
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the present
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.
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,
although
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 there are some new features after the development, several old spots are still protected. In 2000,
the
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a
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 large number of bookstore
area
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areas
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 were occupied by
fiction
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the fiction
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 book
section
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. Meanwhile, the
others
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other
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 categories
such
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 as art, hobbies, non-fiction and cookery were located in small
section
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 areas. In the past, people were
going to face
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faced
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 travel
section
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, new books and
service
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a service
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 desk after going through the entrance, which
remain
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remains
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 the same until now.
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, there are some new improvements with
cafe
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the cafe
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 and tables area. The cafe location is exactly the location where
non-fiction
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the non-fiction
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 books
section
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were
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was
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 located in the past. Meanwhile, the tables are taking the place of art, hobbies, and cookery book
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section
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sections
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 which
located
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are located
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 in the middle of the bookstore. The non-fiction
section
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also
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 moved to the top right corner area which
previously
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was previously
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 occupied by
fiction
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the fiction
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 book
section
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.
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