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9/12 The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

9/12 The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
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This
 chart illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of
visit
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visits
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 to several nations
since
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from
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 1990 to 2005.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 every country had increased steadily over the period, Europe and America were the most popular
place
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places
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 for international travel, and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East was the least.
First,
in each nation, the trend of
visit
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visits
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 had grown in
this
 15
years
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year
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 period.
For example
, Europe was 280.2
million
 in the first year, which was the highest visited nation, and it became 400.2
million
 in the
last
 year. America was the second highest, it had 80.5
million
 in 1990, which was less than one-third of
Europpe's
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Europe's
visit
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visits
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, and it had a stable growth to 113.2
in
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from
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 1990
in
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to
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 2005.
Similiarly
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Similarly
,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East was 9.8 and 11.3
million
 in 1990 and 1995 respectively, and the number became 15.8
million
 after 15 years. Every country in the table had a steady increase, either the highest or the lowest visited nation.
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