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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
#households #income
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The graph illustrates
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the statistic
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statistic
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statistics
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 of
household
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households
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 In the US based on
income
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 per year in 3 periods
such
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 as 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the US
households
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 in total in each annual
income
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category
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 have
been fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015. In that period, the highest and the lowest number of
households
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 in total for each
income
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category
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 was different. In 2007, the highest annual
income
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 for US
households
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 was more than $100,000 at 29
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millions
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million
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 and the lowest is $75,000 - $99,999 at 15
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millions
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million
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. In 2011,
different
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 situation was figured out. There was
down
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a downward
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 trend in 2011 for
annual
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the annual
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income
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category
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. The highest
income
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 for US
households
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 was $25,000 - $49,000 with 29
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millions
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million
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 US
households
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. In 2007, the highest annual
income
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 for US
households
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 was more than $100,000 at 29
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millions
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million
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 and the lowest is $75,000 - $99,999 at 15
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millions
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million
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. In 2011,
different
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a different
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 situation was figured out. There was
down
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a downward
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 trend in 2011 for
annual
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the annual
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income
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category
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. The highest
income
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 for US
households
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 was $25,000 - $49,000 with 29
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millions
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million
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 US
households
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 and only 13
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millions
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million
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 US
households
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gotten
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getting
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 $75,000 - $99,999
income
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 per year. In 2015, the
income
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 was better than before. The majority of US
households
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 approximately 33
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millions
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million
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 got $100,000 or more
income
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 per year and only 15
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millions
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million
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 got $75,000 - $ 99,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, households, category, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figured" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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