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You were advised by your doctor that you need to do more physical exercises. Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you. Why you want to do physical exercise. What type of physical exercises you are planning to do? Why do you want your friend to join

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Dear Navneet, I hope you and your family are doing splendidly. I am doing great too. It is been a long time since we met each other.
Therefore
, I am writing
this
 letter to ask you to join me in my fitness journey. I know you must be confused
why
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 suddenly started focusing on my health, the reason behind
that is
 the instructions from my family doctor. As you know, I went through a knee injury which became the cause of my
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being over-weight
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over-weight
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 and
as a result
, now I am a PCOD patient. So, just to reduce the impact of
this
 health issue, the specialist suggested I do some regular exercises. As per my doctor's guidance, I will do 30
minutes
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30-minute
 walk in the morning and evening
as well as
 bending movements at least 25 times in 3 sets.
Besides
 that, I decided that I would work on my shoulder movements for better flexibility. I need your help throughout
this
 process because as a good friend you can motivate me to do all these required activities. it is quite boring for me to spend 2 hours daily in the park alone so just to make
this
 journey more enjoyable I need your company. I hope you will consider my request and join me next week. Yours faithfully Arthdeefs Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Try to connect your paragraphs with more transitional phrases to enhance the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all your sentences are clear and concise, and avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'it is been' instead of 'it has been'.
task achievement
You clearly explained the reason for needing to do physical exercise, the type of exercises, and why you want your friend to join you.
task achievement
Your writing tone is suitable and friendly, which is perfect for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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