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Living in a country where you must speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often argued that it is more advantageous to live in different countries with different languages from your mother tongue even if there is some pressure. I completely agree with
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 opinion and think that difficult for academic and social life to adapt to new
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 in a different country. First of all, I believe communicating with strangers becomes a crucial moment when you live in a foreign nation. Even if someone can get a high score on a language examination,
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at the moment when speaking with local
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,
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 person needs to translate the first.
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, a lot of
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 learn English in their own country with their
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, at the time when they come to English to continue their studies, they think they can speak with local
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 and understand what they speak clearly. But they can flow with the conversation because they speak speedily with the new dialect that they hear. That’s why it is difficult for
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 who live in different languages to deal with
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 situation.
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, from a social point of view, it is difficult to make friends with local
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 in different nations.
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,
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 choose friends that they will comfort
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 communicating.
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, if you cannot speak their language very well even in class or outside class, they will never get close to you.
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, communication is the key to making a better friendship.
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, I strongly believe living in a different nationality becomes a big challenge for academic and social life when you turn to speak other languages in your daily life because you will face a problem communicating with strangers and difficulty in making friends.

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Include more specific examples and develop the ideas thoroughly to strengthen the main points in both paragraphs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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